我尊贵的邻居(11)

Justing

井忘川
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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
. P: Z. e$ s7 w  D8 [. N唯一的元老
一住三十多年

" V# _: P+ b6 d邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
( g% f+ b6 c- L# o+ w1 w+ V, H/ W白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
似不识  岁月为何物

" A8 A- F3 d4 Z头顶英国文学硕士的光环
4 [/ D! A+ n. r6 z; H邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
邻居的字
则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤

邻居酷喜中国文化
" @2 ~5 |5 i) V8 K8 c5 d说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
8 Y2 x8 K; [9 \7 i7 K$ B那不知名的曲调
反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

Justing

) _6 ]# W9 k% W+ n' \% u) K英文版，欢迎指正：

Living here for more than thirty years,
. G4 t1 Y; D( T' H! Hmy prestigous neighbour
is the only first owner of the unit properties
in our community ---
! M% l+ N; C! r% \tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
magically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
& I) y' C% C' a9 dShe has white hairs and red faces.
* ?  A2 G4 `( ~5 |Her light-footed movement
% w# t/ w8 Y9 r! M' g& Eis just like a flying swallow.
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( J, t, R) J' A" [$ S% UShe shovels the snow on her door lane
before driving her own car;
% h& ?6 |  l* A# w- P% B/ n8 kshe digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
9 H- y! R& H6 P4 P. ?as if she did not know what years mean.

5 G- Z3 A7 ?: s; p  u; g: d) `- cWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
" y6 e3 H$ R, W. [/ [1 x2 z7 \neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
as if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
5 O  o8 n& U9 u# w7 ?, S- DNeighbour's handwriting
3 t: R6 C$ B/ y2 d* `3 l( Mis so vigorous as to be the old trees
interwined by dry vines.

' G* R, H' P4 @/ e5 _2 `* X0 yNeighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
, ~% Q7 n  e9 ~She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
0 S8 ^$ }; w) t9 a; {6 O% [' Z9 W' zWell, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
! o' _3 X9 T% i8 Y' othe unknown tune is extolling
2 J; ]) |) L( a) m: f1 s# U8 cthe magnificence and brilliance of the life,
! J! T$ R( `' i8 b2 X1 ?( k" aagain and again.

Justing

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土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

Justing

身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
* Y2 [. a6 b5 L3 \7 R) OJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

! L9 j: B! F- D/ F从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
另外，翻译改动一处：
! g5 f% E) v% |, aHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
+ |( P) O' z0 H8 P: T8 h. W修改为：
* p. y. s2 A1 f! H5 ?. T4 bHer light-footed movement
# Y9 h# H6 _. }2 I. Xis just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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真的是太像朱镕基了！

Justing

6# Justing
7 A. T% @& j( J0 N$ K真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。