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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!% ^/ x6 R- K# R. I0 y

7 I0 a" Q2 C& }( tIn the garden of my heart
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From sunset til dawn; N, T% o6 i! J. s" C+ Z0 l
Through darkness to light1 J* ]4 a! X  Q0 a% t; I
Nourished with my soul
6 X$ r, k  @5 S( ^! XDevoured my sorrow by thee" T! \1 }# I0 C/ t% w; R( O

9 s' @+ z& _/ i$ U8 ]In the memory of my life
3 \" ^4 U( ]! r& a) r" [. o+ F/ tYou planted a dream+ J: N$ ]! T/ b" v1 \% W) n. }' F
Should the sky fall down on me
" f" q- f- D1 FMay promises fade in the sea
* b& H/ t9 d* n4 ?0 ASewing back every broken pieces  K3 j6 }1 d# {7 U4 X
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
# z  @; Z  o& h/ F$ l- k. L听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!2 l' S$ g* u) u5 S+ b% e/ u

+ E* G+ ~4 N* }1 WIn the garden of my heart" }; q/ J3 @- x3 M7 }5 @9 b
You planted a tree
5 |8 r% T  \/ a( hFrom sunset til dawn% f1 C% w; f0 f7 n; G
Through darkness to light
; k& _. y+ h  {Nourished with my soul4 w' q: c) k8 C# ]
Devoured my so ...
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) {# z( L/ V/ l9 n: ?$ Q眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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写得真好。4 n' x3 K) e* L5 ^

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表! n: I" T7 z' y/ B, T+ b  s
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?) V- q9 o1 ?* X$ g% {
写得真好。
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
1 A! ?( U7 L3 F6 O/ A) p0 z% ~如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表1 d" I1 L$ ^* k" T, }
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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' @$ ^8 ]- B( _* y8 B- i" WThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".; @6 L- |6 j- h$ K& J" {
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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$ ~' p$ v, L% u5 O1 A0 dShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
4 D) P0 k; V' X. Wthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表" h7 b- D9 t1 W; \9 Q& o8 Q
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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4 w9 r' D7 ^7 P' Z有啊,有很多经典的例子。; |5 ]# [. r- [+ C  n
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave/ ]( K0 t# k: W
For I am not there,2 Z0 d) R& [! t, z8 u8 n3 u
I've a date with a butterfly
2 E  ?; s7 j4 [, G; |7 b' E# u" @To dance on the air.8 j( h3 t: w. ?
If I'm missed, find a flower,
- d7 Y9 ^( N; T. j5 yI'll be there too,2 k: T" q: ^" O# q8 I4 u& H6 V: j' t, W
Sniffing it's fragrance
0 u2 l- L5 Q  i3 }0 `8 j' dRight next to you.5 ~8 y) O% @; m
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Don't be sad$ `: ~3 ?" j2 h" [
When you remember me,
) }. I- `$ u' C- ?+ V% ]For I'm singing in the sunshine,9 }+ Q3 M5 j2 N0 a& P+ o
Wild and free,
2 M/ w' P% J3 j) D) G" K0 SFlirting with the lighting,  x$ f. r& D& p! |5 F
Playing tag with the wind,7 m) r, R4 d7 |( T( k
Chasing the thunder
; v+ _- ^$ o, U4 j8 g+ `Time and again,
: _( c( a& C; W! ^Soaring with the eagle,
7 J+ s6 B* i8 u( ~& g3 {Swimming in the sea,) w; @/ a6 {. i
Enjoying all of nature8 J/ C+ s2 O9 ^2 P, G+ W; e! i
While I'm waiting for thee.
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