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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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1 S6 {% ^9 p/ b! W( [In the garden of my heart" Q; P, u1 {& i* ^- T# o2 W/ M
You planted a tree
2 H3 s# P5 k3 [! TFrom sunset til dawn
" q( C5 |; L, r& y' t9 JThrough darkness to light
5 y5 y% x* w7 s/ s, S- vNourished with my soul. U; i9 j  t. {
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
2 g9 Z1 R0 ^* d) L0 BYou planted a dream9 q, u; j6 V0 H# W0 d6 a
Should the sky fall down on me7 f. l* n; Y8 I
May promises fade in the sea9 [0 ]' k3 r( Y
Sewing back every broken pieces; Q- `- W+ h# Q# F, S, g; O2 ]( _
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表+ U4 U4 q4 q0 ]! x4 i- N7 N% ?
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
+ _% G0 [0 h, V3 I( fYou planted a tree
0 @( Z8 x. W0 R# p! jFrom sunset til dawn; C, a# ^( M, |2 A5 V
Through darkness to light
" b8 v8 `& R3 X6 P4 }1 ?5 L3 r7 |3 nNourished with my soul$ |2 t% D' [3 E: S; c6 p# k# p
Devoured my so ...

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3 a2 K; {2 N+ v+ J眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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写得真好。
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: o6 ?- I+ j" y9 x1 x加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
4 K. n5 m" w: B# j6 W( p& ^眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
# m# D  |% X1 q$ {; x% {% {写得真好。
( \2 r) x6 V/ P加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
" B3 q. _* H( \- v* v2 c: r如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表/ _- e) u; F  b2 p+ G/ K- s7 R2 c8 p
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.  {% f, i: B: V6 W  ?
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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! N8 p% t; ^6 G% `; D7 F$ F1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".5 ~# ~  \! A+ Y& S9 l6 g& ]7 [

- l1 [: [6 K- `' j! ~2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
! D& |2 z' {  O+ l. n5 d2 `thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表! }( c' J& j7 i0 L, w
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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0 y* l' f8 B9 G/ K5 EShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。2 x, ?3 Z6 s% v+ m0 A& ~
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》! x: F- W$ W# C. _" S5 H) ^7 m

4 w: R1 h& Z+ G4 r4 dDon't weep at my grave- O6 Q3 @& t! k
For I am not there,6 S3 M3 j6 |+ i: ~6 \5 b
I've a date with a butterfly
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7 [1 e" m! B! }1 l- r- kIf I'm missed, find a flower,
. _. b- X' Y/ T$ i0 S6 `  u# ]9 |( eI'll be there too,
' n8 Y$ x+ K. H) H9 uSniffing it's fragrance+ Y7 b, K* Q# Z* L# y: }! y+ t1 ?  ]
Right next to you.
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: x  `0 G9 y( C8 H- G" q7 \Don't be sad7 X9 l+ C& X# x2 [
When you remember me,
! U2 I0 @6 g( _  q( j4 a* d1 Y  y0 uFor I'm singing in the sunshine,. p* {; U9 E3 E. V/ s- j8 s
Wild and free,9 L. `9 Q$ r; j, n# p' n
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Playing tag with the wind,
4 s3 [. M1 W2 A/ ~) c2 [1 h* kChasing the thunder
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Soaring with the eagle,6 |# J- x6 S" v( ?3 b4 ^! Q! |
Swimming in the sea,- M! w! k4 B1 e& U! {
Enjoying all of nature/ O/ z7 @3 P1 [" c- m
While I'm waiting for thee.
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