我尊贵的邻居(11)

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我尊贵的邻居
是我们小区  几十户
5 ]7 P) f5 r# I1 s1 V8 v. W唯一的元老
一住三十多年
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  D% v1 r' z  @邻居八十多了  却身轻如燕
白发红颜  不见皱纹
开车铲雪  挖土栽花
: S- ^8 r, J$ L+ \$ @似不识  岁月为何物

; N! g3 i# ]7 l头顶英国文学硕士的光环
) |  I' A6 u! Q! D& o8 Y8 |, [邻居气宇轩昂
如同女面朱熔基
) ~1 H7 c! o3 W; b邻居的字
$ `3 H. k/ p8 ~, M则遒劲似  老树裹枯藤
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邻居酷喜中国文化
" o' e. S2 |7 R2 e+ `说她属土龙
其笛声也悠扬
那是从隔壁传来的
唯一的声响
2 Q7 A* {2 V6 `' _那不知名的曲调
- J$ M* [" K4 X7 `& U8 u; p反复颂扬着  生命的壮美与灿烂

Justing

这首哪天有空好好翻译一下，写张贺卡送过去，顺便取取经。回帖备忘。

张玉

老人是宝啊

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换

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英文版，欢迎指正：
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Living here for more than thirty years,
8 Q/ x. _5 S- N9 I. G4 v0 ]7 Jmy prestigous neighbour
# J/ s* P3 ]6 t- i; t& His the only first owner of the unit properties
/ ^5 V2 \1 H3 din our community ---
tens of townhouse condos.

Neighbour is more than eighty years old,
& K: E" v. M$ w$ r) Xmagically, without wrinkles into your eyes.
She has white hairs and red faces.
% o, F) B. Q, D% ?: D9 kHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.

+ N; g$ ~& c6 }6 R; n. Y& d2 EShe shovels the snow on her door lane
& L' u- y* a) C9 z4 nbefore driving her own car;
( a# @9 X! q9 a) l% ]she digs her back yard
to plant flowers ---
! X9 Q; T2 Y0 l- N1 A- Sas if she did not know what years mean.
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9 G6 E7 Q) Z/ w) A; e! cWith the glory of the Master's Degree in English literature,
6 U; j9 _2 N+ j2 ^neighbour has a dignified appearance ---
6 H5 {+ I' }% B& s8 ]+ Fas if she were the female twin of Chinese Premier Rongji Zhu.
Neighbour's handwriting
is so vigorous as to be the old trees
$ ?% w; G3 B' D. e+ i3 I- Qinterwined by dry vines.

Neighbour loves Chinese culture deeply.
3 E- X# ?  w) l6 ~. ]0 ?She said she belongs to the Earth Dragon.
Well, her fluting is very melodious ---
that is the sole sound going into my ears
from the next side of my wall;
% ~6 T; E/ Z7 `4 O* Pthe unknown tune is extolling
the magnificence and brilliance of the life,
again and again.

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) q  l$ I# m" Z3 S" e/ Z$ w2 j$ F4 v5 k土龙，1928年，与朱熔基同年，具体到月份，邻居也只比朱熔基小1个多月。

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身轻如燕 与 不见皱纹 位置互换
3 g: ?* R  o3 z) h* J, U+ S0 sJusting 发表于 2011-1-2 20:03

; s* v3 Z% R2 p$ J8 z从音韵角度考虑，还是不换为宜。我写新诗，仿照古诗平仄的要求，比较注意语句缓（相当于平声）急（相当于仄声）的交错搭配，这是我的独到之处。
5 V- T% r) T8 O  J另外，翻译改动一处：
+ r: K3 W+ f  j# t& _0 L1 j7 R4 pHer light-footed movement
is just like a flying swallow.
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" h3 z5 n: X% @9 hHer light-footed movement
is just like a swallow flying.

hm86888

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- b: R* X7 l( i. w8 Z+ P2 o& p真的是太像朱镕基了！

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真的是太像朱镕基了！
hm86888 发表于 2011-1-4 23:35

我贴的就是朱熔基啊，邻居还不敢照。这个 镕 字我词库里居然没有。