In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

0 o" F7 W# a7 r4 xIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
( p5 M0 N$ w+ W3 LDevoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
) ~" r7 D: [0 |9 ]) |You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
; G/ D9 ^1 a* PMay promises fade in the sea
/ h! O' W, W: S' L, d6 C* pSewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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$ F7 v! p! M  m+ E3 p' HIn the garden of my heart
0 s1 T' J+ Q/ U: a+ ~4 TYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
* G8 E/ v+ O( O/ {4 p: e# lDevoured my so ...

9 O7 L% S; v1 o$ o2 L眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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% a; P; j5 C" }# ^! w写得真好。
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- G- j. {9 l, x; \4 b" V0 `加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
5 ?+ p! j2 K7 h7 H$ H$ M眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

8 @, M% l. z1 Q6 y# ^我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

) }. Z) Y* ^* b  ?/ d5 ~五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

& r0 o/ \5 |" e. v5 `Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

# j0 m2 K/ H& J7 EThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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! v$ @: G& i( e  t/ c1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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& E0 ?3 l* T( L1 |2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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/ A! d2 c1 t7 GShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
1 |* g! o; j4 L0 E/ xthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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) l( w2 p3 S# DShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

$ M; b4 U0 I/ H: w! \# U有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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' {; k( q" J. O$ b2 o6 ?比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

- L1 @8 Y( ]* S0 r+ M* jDon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
' a: w' j7 L0 R$ s5 o( d6 N, HIf I'm missed, find a flower,
( M* \( _0 n8 q4 d) B8 m% JI'll be there too,
+ t; p9 g) o* V/ X5 N4 JSniffing it's fragrance
6 a4 s8 Q9 O2 z' N! M# F" m8 m; XRight next to you.

Don't be sad
4 d: y* M0 B5 r8 S& U2 u+ IWhen you remember me,
: }! H% |! h: n/ T- DFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
3 D* e. c( r; _% n3 {8 W" N. Y+ AFlirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
  z* ]1 [: ~+ {7 K! V6 V3 p1 eChasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
8 k3 Z% w9 w  Z) z) k* O/ G- `& z0 g8 ^While I'm waiting for thee.