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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!( k! t* m& q1 |% s  h! d
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In the garden of my heart+ ]+ H2 a5 I1 \5 ^
You planted a tree4 j! E2 h+ }1 r8 g2 R
From sunset til dawn+ g& N$ L& O) b' S' ~, q& |) d
Through darkness to light0 y4 }! O0 g" F  j9 }' Q" O
Nourished with my soul
/ B9 G, ?/ N* O4 n% t) n' @Devoured my sorrow by thee. R+ N; z2 N  e* a' A; N' Y: o

# c: ^0 H, S2 m+ R# d3 ]In the memory of my life
+ }6 w  h( [! T# v5 b5 F2 f( tYou planted a dream
' c. ^; Q# X% v5 g# I! Q% ^: gShould the sky fall down on me
# d( b) p' g7 zMay promises fade in the sea4 x6 K: O$ Q# s
Sewing back every broken pieces6 k1 X) Q7 B+ m
Bursting the love out of me" }1 {1 s$ v) l9 z

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表3 ]3 B2 O/ u# @3 c) G
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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0 Y8 N" y& b& R, k) N. z4 D* mIn the garden of my heart" c3 j  m! D4 K& V
You planted a tree
3 ]# B) z2 B6 EFrom sunset til dawn
, T$ l  w7 u( D4 `$ j7 y$ kThrough darkness to light
( }) i. y2 W: U8 w& F5 dNourished with my soul
6 u9 k' P4 X  [4 gDevoured my so ...

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+ K) Y/ i) z6 d; K7 J4 f眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?$ D( `3 |0 n. L: s$ }# O

! u5 W( _" k+ t: K写得真好。
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表* @6 W! A2 H! n0 H
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?7 p7 t5 j/ H* \& H) b
写得真好。
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: D! a/ a( _  c: ]1 {8 k) @+ g我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表( \4 A9 c" ~! s' Z. m
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.+ H$ q& @: |! p0 h- I9 X) _* E
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表0 Z, n' g. w- n% v, ~  k
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".: M+ M/ d% ~( q& a6 k% S, Q: ~* R
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
4 {; k% M/ p& {7 j7 Jthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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! y: v, _& z$ e$ `* Z1 Z# KShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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% @, H, j5 \4 ~; t诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表' {7 p1 E6 @5 q: p/ N! N/ h) R
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。7 u3 B$ s7 J" q& h  @5 e
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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' C. W: ?, A" H. f比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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: v. n) r- k1 E+ K: VDon't weep at my grave
! _+ R4 D' w4 Y, s! w, x3 n  qFor I am not there," E% r' p' R* b) W7 r+ ]
I've a date with a butterfly' V+ |( ~) \' r
To dance on the air.2 S5 i/ ?4 B6 H: g
If I'm missed, find a flower,6 O" }9 ]" Q9 ?% R5 M
I'll be there too,8 x/ e7 l9 u# T2 i5 V
Sniffing it's fragrance1 B: L* D/ H! c+ `& Y; g) @6 a; |0 r, S
Right next to you.
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Don't be sad
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For I'm singing in the sunshine,
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, [: o3 }& g  f& ?$ H  r$ e5 |Flirting with the lighting,6 j5 |0 i  @- n, `+ f
Playing tag with the wind,
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Time and again,
5 ^+ _, |/ v, {  E8 TSoaring with the eagle,
+ o! y2 N) ]8 o! ]6 I% CSwimming in the sea,! ]3 F* _6 m% V, w1 s- F8 E3 v
Enjoying all of nature( k4 r3 q5 L) Q4 l& h
While I'm waiting for thee.
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