In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

  o0 X" d7 b; wIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee
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8 `$ h, ]/ J& c& w: G& mIn the memory of my life
+ k! r2 i* a5 L6 ^7 l) `- rYou planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
! V+ G2 V7 i+ C4 t% G: EMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
1 r/ y4 o7 e" IBursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
7 O* p0 l. B7 e& v  ?: h0 `听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
# n9 ~/ t# U8 x) xYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
2 O8 B$ A' E4 Y. e1 n8 FDevoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

写得真好。

6 Y6 a8 D$ V2 Q加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
' ^) O% B! c2 X; K  r  t5 c2 O眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
9 F5 z% ~  P! x" T; u1 v加精加精！

0 x/ x( O/ O$ y$ T  K5 @我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

  s# ?& g' e* ]; h0 A6 CSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
" T9 G8 |  _" n& l  Q# s# ?Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

! X, O- P( b2 Z. `0 W2 e6 Y; cSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

, o* Y  [8 u, K8 Y. Q9 E! ^8 u( W1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
& P' M, A# X' z" ?" i: Vthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
% S% V1 l/ B. b6 ^For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
5 D% c& F( J0 z- l; Z; ^" rTo dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
! h3 |% k' G, E( j: b7 kI'll be there too,
* V. ?/ o* F0 CSniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.
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Don't be sad
1 Y+ S4 E8 [! I  c6 R' IWhen you remember me,
7 H& _' O( [# w1 RFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
; c7 f- s/ S, p5 T2 J, fWild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
  V6 x1 a6 S" e+ y$ w) j: GChasing the thunder
. y  B. o. {+ w9 U0 ITime and again,
$ G  K5 m$ L  xSoaring with the eagle,
& m4 k# e1 W8 n: pSwimming in the sea,
: N: ?% a; q( G3 Y) L1 H) o* g9 fEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.