In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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$ L  @: q% X; U  [  o* ]: C! xIn the garden of my heart
. S, H3 D+ e" UYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
( P, I8 u( o4 g' R0 JDevoured my sorrow by thee

- i! B2 i- g1 ^In the memory of my life
5 g8 D/ B1 o: y1 O+ @You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
9 Y: n, S( H  B# [0 Z, JMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
" v' |% ^0 M* @% H% _% N# b  yBursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
* @+ I" L2 j7 {* j( m听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
0 _; u6 K9 M( XYou planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
! n8 @' _5 S2 HThrough darkness to light
0 M7 g9 c+ i  A, k* c* Y" J* ^Nourished with my soul
; H7 @5 J. N8 C+ jDevoured my so ...

0 [0 f2 ], l: `$ b+ ?眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。
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加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
4 Z8 [7 ?' a' g( ?加精加精！

2 C2 Q5 N! J+ X( i6 y7 d我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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" h  A/ v: o) g2 w1 ]. ~8 mSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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2 ~8 N0 w5 y, D. `: E1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

1 ]4 C4 J) x$ {; hShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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3 J/ L' W) g( t! ?Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

6 h+ ]. C' _, Q$ ]5 L诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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" j) m. h/ ]  I7 t  K! ~Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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9 v! }' e  P( S" l% h有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

Don't weep at my grave
! s; e7 p! Z+ \+ O; kFor I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
5 j3 K' H6 K/ \; A3 L+ E5 {2 sI'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.

# I$ D5 }8 g' l( G1 @4 vDon't be sad
When you remember me,
7 v! [, @& g0 P0 f; R5 [  d& EFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
5 ]" |, W' [" `! d2 T# l% ^Flirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
) H" _9 U! G: F, g" y* CChasing the thunder
% m) h; T8 E. ?7 V8 bTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
- Z, T- }) g" z! [* dSwimming in the sea,
: v6 E  e! r0 o/ nEnjoying all of nature
. K8 e. I1 x8 h. \/ ^2 QWhile I'm waiting for thee.