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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!/ n) G& S2 s& Z% a' w

0 o" F7 W# a7 r4 xIn the garden of my heart9 C+ K6 Y! w, n/ r# [& @
You planted a tree2 I2 y% C7 \* a, r9 N
From sunset til dawn7 X! F: S9 e$ p, R
Through darkness to light* o+ \# P$ ?, U
Nourished with my soul
( p5 M0 N$ w+ W3 LDevoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
) ~" r7 D: [0 |9 ]) |You planted a dream8 |- m3 D' o! e6 N- W
Should the sky fall down on me
; G/ D9 ^1 a* PMay promises fade in the sea
/ h! O' W, W: S' L, d6 C* pSewing back every broken pieces: M. R) J$ w( E7 Q
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表  _3 @# [  {# F  H3 ^
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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$ F7 v! p! M  m+ E3 p' HIn the garden of my heart
0 s1 T' J+ Q/ U: a+ ~4 TYou planted a tree: h" a/ ?9 j) q) N0 w8 v
From sunset til dawn; S, d+ w; s$ I5 Q( A
Through darkness to light1 e, c2 V5 B& A; x
Nourished with my soul
* G8 E/ v+ O( O/ {4 p: e# lDevoured my so ...
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9 O7 L% S; v1 o$ o2 L眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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% a; P; j5 C" }# ^! w写得真好。
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- G- j. {9 l, x; \4 b" V0 `加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
5 ?+ p! j2 K7 h7 H$ H$ M眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?0 P0 M6 f0 F4 }
写得真好。  ]4 Z7 o0 i7 v* P5 H4 Y" n
加精加精!

8 @, M% l. z1 Q6 y# ^我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表/ Q& a# _' q6 F- U7 F% k
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

) }. Z) Y* ^* b  ?/ d5 ~五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表8 x# X9 \  y1 i3 Y( {7 O5 x9 r+ P3 G9 w
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.3 P" m( t3 P3 @  Y+ T

& r0 o/ \5 |" e. v5 `Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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# j0 m2 K/ H& J7 EThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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! v$ @: G& i( e  t/ c1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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& E0 ?3 l* T( L1 |2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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/ A! d2 c1 t7 GShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表3 f( b- X" }: z% e  q
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
1 |* g! o; j4 L0 E/ xthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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) l( w2 p3 S# DShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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$ M; b4 U0 I/ H: w! \# U有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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' {; k( q" J. O$ b2 o6 ?比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》4 O; X4 D6 G& g: `& Q. ]/ i0 P% N

- L1 @8 Y( ]* S0 r+ M* jDon't weep at my grave+ ?" K0 v' I# f, J6 c3 f$ L
For I am not there,' T: W- `8 J& b+ x" M1 b
I've a date with a butterfly+ E1 j" N3 i: T% A" x" E
To dance on the air.
' a: w' j7 L0 R$ s5 o( d6 N, HIf I'm missed, find a flower,
( M* \( _0 n8 q4 d) B8 m% JI'll be there too,
+ t; p9 g) o* V/ X5 N4 JSniffing it's fragrance
6 a4 s8 Q9 O2 z' N! M# F" m8 m; XRight next to you.3 }0 b3 J( f. j/ `. h; S
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Don't be sad
4 d: y* M0 B5 r8 S& U2 u+ IWhen you remember me,
: }! H% |! h: n/ T- DFor I'm singing in the sunshine,& j/ V: |0 j! b
Wild and free,
3 D* e. c( r; _% n3 {8 W" N. Y+ AFlirting with the lighting,8 V1 X  A; l; ^! t
Playing tag with the wind,
  z* ]1 [: ~+ {7 K! V6 V3 p1 eChasing the thunder# Z! x' A; m* Y3 W5 ^( I' j
Time and again,3 a, f0 ~* U# {" M
Soaring with the eagle,& d6 M$ P0 X: O
Swimming in the sea,9 [# D, {! o6 h0 q  o0 G2 e
Enjoying all of nature
8 k3 Z% w9 w  Z) z) k* O/ G- `& z0 g8 ^While I'm waiting for thee.
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