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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level. 3 p, d7 j# g: Z9 d. G1 j/ O

4 T9 Q# Y' B2 K  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization. . z6 X3 O- R9 u' r/ M
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  2. For example, you work in a big factory.
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1 e% P9 T/ p' t  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory. 9 W0 u9 j5 g/ Y2 T( l+ C

7 a7 ^* O% n& r& ]" ?  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job. , q/ m" n5 O- f; o! Y( v
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  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career. ) K/ B3 ?2 C+ ^$ o- [2 t5 A
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  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck. ; E1 F6 V, E9 J9 A2 E
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  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.
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  E& B  i( p6 j# q# _  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level. $ G& k  E8 g, @) u
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  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life. 7 Q+ }( @' G. l' p) V) u- @

! k( L  K0 \3 H6 e% G1 V2 L. t  6. Their brain is still very young. 2 Q; D7 n7 Q% W# ?7 L/ z/ Y: c8 k, x

' B* _" ]- \: I, s# ^, F, e7 t  改进: They are still immature.
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  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things.
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* O% g0 L( ?% p7 g  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better. # F3 O( z& ?( Y3 C( r1 G9 j  {

8 ], i- x' s  q: G3 _  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
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  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong. 5 \! r: F7 t  v% F% ?: X) @& A
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  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.
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  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time. $ O7 c& O5 P6 F. }) F0 j

1 l! ^! U1 Y! |7 |  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life. + L1 D  x+ ~1 t/ l9 h3 x
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  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.
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, I7 _7 R! H/ a7 M& T: S  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development. 7 z* S' }: b8 K. p5 ]

! Y4 i' n: M4 V+ B9 o6 i  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development. / l  O# J. P! r3 J; j( b
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  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money. 8 X, n& ^( q+ F* k4 \; k
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  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money. $ l8 e2 j8 d  D

* {; d4 Z! b5 q) Y- I  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.
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: d( b. u+ W" L, t& Y' o, x  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one.
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7 Y- Q3 e5 D& c+ a' w% d# c  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.
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  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more.
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4 R- ]3 v2 L5 c! L2 |  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products. ) Z- j& H2 \) F3 Z/ ]/ G1 P

, [5 S5 y# B9 l3 [6 Y  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products. 4 @# L# h" M4 X9 S# y" T7 t: N
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  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills.   c# B$ P* k- g6 ^2 M1 _. G  _# C9 e( j
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  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills. 9 j, }4 }# i% \! I+ \; |% M$ g
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  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians. + X2 [$ a5 _* [3 S0 ?
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  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand. , ~. T0 A3 i4 O1 p& O  h
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  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body. ; ^1 L! e! ^+ X5 a* r
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  改进: This knowledge will become part of you.
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* y2 F+ m0 r, `5 A: |& {! L: q9 E  19. They cannot think clearly. 9 y4 Q' u. M- B( c

$ h, B  ?& H/ T5 b2 e  改进: They cannot think straight. 7 v- X6 a& B: C, A  v

2 e6 v: [$ n0 C  20. Money can improve their living standard. 1 k1 F- ?8 t! v; g" I
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  改进: Money can improve their life.
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  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money. 6 n2 D2 W% G8 F: c; o
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  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money. 1 v0 @  r8 V, R2 y3 {6 Y; j
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  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life. + d$ Z9 s; r7 S: b9 ]( A" O

* i" U: x& H: U7 g8 L  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life. 4 {5 o0 y+ W1 Z; C& N2 r
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  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later. 7 i& \9 z7 h6 w- m

; C% i' z7 R+ |+ B8 @  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn. : Z7 R/ k6 E% k

1 s% t* T) j/ s; g  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano.
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. _( p3 f1 T+ e7 p# f0 N+ e  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes. ) g* [, l6 Q( C& O3 a6 w" w
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  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others. 5 r( C- g0 y/ I' I9 s' h- Q; ?* O
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  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others.
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+ p" w* O8 H6 y! J0 ]  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
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  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal. ) |) Y! j# @2 y+ O! e* J$ `
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  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
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1 \: e. U4 H$ [) @7 L  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax. 2 r) [& X8 Q/ i6 l, _! `

2 p& }' n  D1 X. z  H  28. What's about nonsmokers?
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( D. U) ~' ~4 l4 Q  改进: What about nonsmokers? ( W8 f% o; I' E
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  29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
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  改进: Why not be a non-smoker? 7 A  A) S7 F+ U$ ?7 \
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  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life. , d/ n  r, o% S0 P$ |
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  改进: Everyone has friends in his life. 5 D* r: S  L  {: a+ D) k9 M

5 F! Q8 u7 F# k  31. I am not good at maths, but English 4 u# t8 t7 d, i0 R
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  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English. ! g- [1 d# c" A) h4 z

  A* R3 {: J) T  F  o  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time? 0 x, h8 z9 w0 D! V

7 T. z8 c# G! C3 l: G  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time? 4 p; a1 `2 W; V2 V

3 f; `1 C' z" D) C; W  33.It is children who clear about their interests. ' x* h$ {# G  m! y* l! F1 r: w: s
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  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.   |( i0 z" S" e

+ `+ g6 B" g1 z, S9 K+ M& Y* Z3 Z  34. I agree the latter idea. " x" M! Q  Q6 ^, R
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  改进: I agree with the latter idea. 3 A$ m  `5 ~5 [( S. Z, r

# E0 d0 P6 i2 Y! P% y8 ]  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo. . M5 `* x& N) u' s/ r! D
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  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo. ' E! j0 |7 w7 J& W% D5 W4 ?) L

" F+ w* Y0 d8 c% g, _& s  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
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( N: d& L6 M' C$ u& M/ b  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe. 8 U- b: q5 `: l0 T7 y* s

4 a, [  x+ |9 i9 Y% z  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.
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  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn. ( u3 O# Y% X; l; F9 |9 q

% h  ?! C. p' T; K4 P  38. No one knows all the things. 4 s0 Q$ ?% a' R3 S3 i! v: i( e

# }6 f# l; d" N, y) y1 w2 j9 S) b  改进: No one knows everything. & ]3 E6 z0 Y- K; e$ i8 D" Q' a

2 e( F$ u) L/ w$ A% k  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
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3 U8 s; x( [; e0 g2 t( J! l  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
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/ b( u- |$ [5 ~; m. F+ L, V  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages
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  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
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  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up. 7 _+ X! @8 y+ t+ ]

" z2 x* D9 K* x; |1 P- g2 H5 V1 L  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply 5 ^% {0 @# k$ Y

6 J' K! R" P5 f1 g  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor.
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  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
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4 }5 B9 c/ S5 V3 s, J  43. They will learn the bad habits.
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  改进: They will develop bad habits.
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) F+ N; l" P* i. ^7 _6 {9 f: i. W  44. In this continued process, people make progress. 2 u; ?  k$ V% _6 q$ z1 U+ K0 Q7 c
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  改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
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  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
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  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency.
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1 \0 p; N+ S0 u: k1 T9 Q  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
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% d  @8 |/ C/ t0 u% o* [6 m2 r; P  改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result.
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  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing. 2 J9 `( i: m0 U

6 r- g/ n- p  f% h5 v  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream.   _1 O: |( }0 w7 I' F+ K

* v% }: K9 R9 D' x( J  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost.
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  50. I felt alone. 9 h2 o$ D! y# G$ N( t8 v; M; v  u6 h9 R4 N) g

( F! S6 L  w2 Y+ f# f, |5 Z3 g  改进: I felt lonely.
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good.
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Thanks
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发表于 2005-2-24 09:08 | 显示全部楼层

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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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发表于 2005-8-24 21:11 | 显示全部楼层
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