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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!8 f3 F8 u' d. q" Z! s- z& X
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In the garden of my heart
/ K7 L5 I8 `+ ]) x9 uYou planted a tree$ m( ~5 w( `! g" Q* _! `
From sunset til dawn9 Z: f9 f! w! S
Through darkness to light/ K! [2 m( L5 N. d' |# \8 ?- f# |
Nourished with my soul
4 n1 c3 A& q+ n" b( b5 z: H. M# TDevoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life' M/ ]& ?+ M- D
You planted a dream
/ X: }. g4 r6 ]; o" RShould the sky fall down on me
7 L2 }1 u0 Y6 f( jMay promises fade in the sea
. R4 o# |6 \# `1 ISewing back every broken pieces
5 Q0 z+ Z& `$ F# w% D. |Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
( M# T" a4 h& R8 W1 \3 s2 E听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!3 y1 y8 z8 J: F0 L: _
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In the garden of my heart
( Q5 s$ n8 {& _1 R7 mYou planted a tree) y$ e5 ^7 k, T' k2 ~
From sunset til dawn0 v# ]" Y& d" e9 `' {. \, B
Through darkness to light
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Devoured my so ...
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" u' W; ?! b9 ]眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?: H0 G) O$ o8 B! O
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写得真好。
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
, c4 y& e- o7 ]6 e4 ^3 x眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?$ i9 D  M8 o6 T8 e4 |9 G0 W/ i
写得真好。
" ~7 H7 u2 c; o* W' \/ j( T加精加精!

6 }9 k, R8 m) N2 S( N我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表0 O, N3 F( D8 ^! }- N9 `
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.5 F: u' K7 K' P+ h) N% z8 \
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
8 T/ i/ V% Z! M9 w: i3 k( m! K, dShould the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.% d; [$ F% }. Q) d& M0 A7 q. Y

' d. [, A& F8 H6 ^4 YSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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) i; O8 P: ?4 Z% _/ cThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.  ?& w: N+ t5 C7 Y
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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+ l5 P8 q( P$ l7 S1 A2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
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红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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" H! r3 `" v5 M$ _* e- W. QShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
; v" e' u3 U' t) e9 v. o. ?0 f3 |thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
' S2 G7 b( P) \* i* J! U' R; [# ythee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。3 L% R: Y3 h5 l( j6 E. v3 y: S8 O8 b
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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# A" I- s2 j6 q* u- E6 LDon't weep at my grave, M! [6 b" {. \7 z7 W) N* y& B
For I am not there,. g, g" Q: k* O% k8 I
I've a date with a butterfly
- `7 @6 B0 r' e- B* B8 ?To dance on the air.
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I'll be there too," }; G* c1 y; |. B
Sniffing it's fragrance! O/ y7 x" {+ v: Q7 x" Y* A
Right next to you.; c& m3 |8 E/ g& E
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Don't be sad
! Y" L1 Z5 Q% K0 F* m4 }5 J7 n" ^9 WWhen you remember me,1 k* `' [! D- `' L* ^) F* W4 h
For I'm singing in the sunshine,* Y3 y  p$ P3 v
Wild and free,+ L7 `) g/ ~9 ^# u: _
Flirting with the lighting,
3 D8 o# K' j1 l' Y. M8 G4 L! YPlaying tag with the wind,
) w3 m6 P* |0 b( z; P) A' c7 ZChasing the thunder& ]" t, [/ w+ P& W: E2 l! u
Time and again,/ B+ X1 G1 u0 M' Z/ c* C# ^5 N
Soaring with the eagle,! @- |1 C: p6 F# e/ E# D
Swimming in the sea,7 j  }4 \4 i# J  }
Enjoying all of nature
- _$ `2 x7 ^6 }3 l* CWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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