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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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# s/ l0 u3 ^+ y5 N" R/ mIn the garden of my heart
' L2 a5 h& p% e  ?0 Z7 Q, i& B- DYou planted a tree5 e* m: e- |- E. o/ P5 g
From sunset til dawn* y/ \* x' x( @  i% Q1 k2 W: D8 j
Through darkness to light+ \# N' U4 p1 j+ w( V5 u* \9 {
Nourished with my soul
3 d7 U( l$ R% g  T1 pDevoured my sorrow by thee
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5 Y6 p+ g* a8 \4 @In the memory of my life$ g) N$ _7 W+ y7 C
You planted a dream
  M: u- ]4 i4 h/ E$ Z7 qShould the sky fall down on me
. x3 U- P1 c- P0 IMay promises fade in the sea1 d8 \3 T. @% Y# _
Sewing back every broken pieces
) Z. G  q" s0 T  x# j( NBursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
0 M5 b# @7 ?  @& F1 v听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
7 e8 L1 {2 y4 g/ @  V" LYou planted a tree
& P: [4 e7 m8 Z7 W( iFrom sunset til dawn
( [- H0 v) i0 Q" m0 E" l4 ^* N9 b- @Through darkness to light
! H. [5 ]! u( i; b6 ZNourished with my soul
: X7 i6 _6 S. ^8 @Devoured my so ...
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' i  O8 F5 u- H% H/ X眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?: P' a5 D7 b" {& }; `2 @: o7 I( i

2 m3 v- h9 n9 _6 Y" u写得真好。, e0 W" O4 r. ^" j6 ~7 e4 V

. B! l* `7 |% ~" u  x6 x5 ]加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表  [, K( F2 @, r+ M
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
' ]  F$ _. S8 l3 q写得真好。
0 F! u4 r" Q4 \( k5 p6 Y加精加精!

- x. ^$ C7 |3 \! V- [. {& S0 G我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
, O3 j! e/ u. }+ l" S如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

& W8 b7 g# @9 k& @  K! Y8 t五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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# C( s7 L+ R) ?Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表( V) K2 J8 h! D! ]- L( I. f
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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9 c5 S9 A( t6 V  J2 ?% o1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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. e8 E+ n# Q0 W& O% e1 gShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表' C% i5 a; C* g3 X- A% _4 X! x
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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) U6 ?1 V3 w5 ~& r4 q# [, m4 i诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
, u. w- p% H" _; xthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。: i1 v+ A5 }- X! A+ r
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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5 D. B- v, h* _& r" T有啊,有很多经典的例子。1 Z  I' A) d8 ~2 B
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》& M- [. R: ]0 j% V8 g3 z

4 {- t$ v+ m. hDon't weep at my grave
7 N5 V: {4 ~) F" KFor I am not there,, q- w* Y' `6 R. l
I've a date with a butterfly& ^3 k- |! K" }
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If I'm missed, find a flower,) Y6 @) T" R9 L. t. Q5 C
I'll be there too,+ ?0 n- s5 a1 K- m$ W0 c
Sniffing it's fragrance$ ]( s+ R: v2 L+ _9 m# p( m
Right next to you.
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0 Y, D9 ]6 g" C, K* @Don't be sad
3 F# d6 i' R5 @: D! q! P# yWhen you remember me,
8 @& |; v0 E- _4 _For I'm singing in the sunshine,; _' Y( z& j1 V  L4 x) |) \, {
Wild and free,
  q, H8 {! d: }' {& y6 RFlirting with the lighting,
$ k9 H- r. h. x  e# o$ B/ KPlaying tag with the wind,
0 V* L8 m( t& F( F1 H0 }Chasing the thunder
. A+ _+ f4 i( c; B* B* ^& ^) F. ETime and again,
& V8 a' O* e% k4 F. A; g( @; z4 `! T8 d' `Soaring with the eagle,- C/ f3 e. B: o% B
Swimming in the sea,
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While I'm waiting for thee.
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