In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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( F" c- ^; l  b4 m) l8 @, wIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
! f: S+ o6 ]7 v- ~  z4 H. _8 \From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
- v* x: m, ?6 k( l* f) ]2 fNourished with my soul
, T- `5 ]- N. h2 pDevoured my sorrow by thee

9 P$ E+ Y' [. P. @) b* JIn the memory of my life
You planted a dream
7 e4 O* R# J# n. \! S# {8 H6 iShould the sky fall down on me
& ?2 ]: r  |8 j5 |- PMay promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
6 t3 t; ]0 Q, ~6 ]5 v听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
0 c; D: Y4 A4 O! u& `; ^From sunset til dawn
* P4 X9 T/ ?1 E- GThrough darkness to light
, s* k: t0 h# w, B/ x3 jNourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

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) j3 A3 g; Y6 z$ }! {5 O$ s2 a6 U5 v眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。
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加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
4 z0 i, Q' L, U/ I5 A眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

" v* s1 ~  F8 A/ W- o我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

$ Q+ {' \" q: D8 l五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

4 r1 Z5 f4 P+ q7 kSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

9 r$ ~3 }2 N' U! e- E: jThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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* j8 D* ]: D% L: K/ ^3 i% q" [1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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Don't weep at my grave
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I've a date with a butterfly
' ^# I. o  G) `) l! j% rTo dance on the air.
: l: M/ j2 X- }$ [7 B/ K  HIf I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
Sniffing it's fragrance
- v/ h+ f: _0 _' B! MRight next to you.
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Don't be sad
3 @, f+ B; w: ?9 d/ Z9 V4 hWhen you remember me,
- f4 D1 V6 b7 `4 Q. @2 v! r7 _For I'm singing in the sunshine,
5 |& {# y8 C/ Z- @Wild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
Playing tag with the wind,
Chasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
1 k2 Y9 {' t1 B3 d7 D7 Q* nEnjoying all of nature
! B+ B, Z. C* Q- R: C! K5 S6 y& A0 n# mWhile I'm waiting for thee.