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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!3 s) Q' o$ x& Z5 U' o- x) R

- }  N9 }# D2 ^" |! L4 v- QIn the garden of my heart
/ w6 ~& M+ G( R8 n' f8 IYou planted a tree
( e- N* t. e% ]. b6 s2 B1 f1 Q4 tFrom sunset til dawn+ k9 {& t; \: N& I1 F& g; d. a+ l
Through darkness to light
2 n1 w' b% b$ W# v8 m# Y& \Nourished with my soul) J0 b; O* N" u5 ]* B
Devoured my sorrow by thee* ^3 N/ E+ X0 N* ]# ^) n; m

2 K  i  G- |# F, o( w1 X5 q0 I- yIn the memory of my life, N- F; F/ W* x& P' x
You planted a dream, X% G; Q6 w) g% d  L6 z- V
Should the sky fall down on me$ v( V0 W! Y! O1 C: o$ R  `# X4 z
May promises fade in the sea5 K3 m) }$ V: Y$ ?% R
Sewing back every broken pieces
. `- j% l- q- }4 V2 v* z. dBursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
/ ~2 A! K2 _' Y! ]/ t. q听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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In the garden of my heart
; m# r: p+ O/ K! j' IYou planted a tree/ q7 u( h1 e% \  y' M  o" H: l; M
From sunset til dawn: R0 o3 G3 X* J
Through darkness to light
$ E1 n& T3 D) }0 B2 r- S+ YNourished with my soul
+ y: ?9 J5 k6 O) I8 Y, s1 f0 P) YDevoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表. Q7 K7 m+ T8 X& N( M
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
0 Z* C7 H! D6 }9 C0 I# H5 u$ U写得真好。7 _$ x5 H/ Z& ~" x- m& I- ~
加精加精!

# t, Y% g; o4 S& Z1 m/ K. v  D( O我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
& ]. p& O" w+ L; k. ^5 d如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表" V! y' ^+ }" s0 K3 O$ Q
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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# A. S! N. l9 R+ `  e" v! t2 ]Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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% J: k7 Y+ [$ m' p5 S! mThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".0 |# A5 V- Y$ D

  w. f+ P4 W4 @' J( y; Z( [2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。) L4 M1 g! G5 m! {; U8 W8 T) @4 x

* x, W' _9 e9 O! w) _+ o8 uShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表8 z- r0 m9 ~3 I. Y/ k- |) J
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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$ }1 H0 k4 R4 j3 P" ~' a' R4 c0 @诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
2 ~) |: c) Y7 u4 jthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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1 M+ i, O2 C) o. }$ t- w8 b) m0 RShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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有啊,有很多经典的例子。. X& ^' O+ F  J
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》
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) Y% A; E' \4 d: b7 CDon't weep at my grave
0 x& `  D; B: H1 f; b1 gFor I am not there,
2 `* s' x! a8 V( u3 l) U9 v7 d- N0 YI've a date with a butterfly
8 y6 T( N/ ]1 c2 U5 TTo dance on the air.' n# s; y  b3 j9 o8 F8 M
If I'm missed, find a flower,
- ?1 D3 P. v9 c% |$ a' HI'll be there too,
9 m1 ^8 ]2 P! C& F" I- LSniffing it's fragrance
8 ?9 f& Y. i# k1 m* e5 FRight next to you.
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+ j; L3 V* c6 n6 ^' RDon't be sad
: i) ?$ j, N6 P* N7 N% s# ~: ?; MWhen you remember me,
0 ~, E  E- ]* M8 N+ l5 MFor I'm singing in the sunshine,
9 h: a+ L7 ?6 U4 Q, P+ b; uWild and free,
" _8 q# t, C# k2 L9 f- M) NFlirting with the lighting,
: c  G0 }( F6 Q1 f3 q+ qPlaying tag with the wind,# t9 S: Q" s6 `$ F% G
Chasing the thunder
. o4 l) y6 V" m+ \8 z' [Time and again,' d* C0 K0 |; E% z$ A7 n
Soaring with the eagle,
" K) c5 |; o) W4 M/ l3 RSwimming in the sea,6 {* C/ Z) p9 G# z7 n
Enjoying all of nature0 ?$ f$ M( Q1 J1 `/ `
While I'm waiting for thee.
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