In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
0 d7 A* |5 f4 O$ ^3 q4 HYou planted a tree
. U/ O: s. m( m9 H' v3 RFrom sunset til dawn
! B" f: R* s( A! V4 T6 \Through darkness to light
7 q9 T3 X# t4 |6 lNourished with my soul
Devoured my sorrow by thee

In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
- d. {8 k* c3 v; G3 L( T7 UShould the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
2 J' Y) z/ R4 v2 `; j# s  [+ j' nSewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me
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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
2 w: `- e* `1 `% I& h! B7 _听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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* e3 x' y. ~' D9 oIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
- r4 n4 I5 J+ l, {, UNourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
; S$ T% ^4 W, Z* p眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
" h' l- G: t! N4 P! A写得真好。
加精加精！

3 V: N+ b# M$ U, C3 v: d8 F我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
; r( Z* _# t: O" z$ z. ]Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

1 M8 t; }6 i- j+ N( FThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.

1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

+ ]( D' ~8 u$ ]& S" H* t/ [! z: h2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
: K. ~# X+ T3 d/ w" n  R" L# Lthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

, C  i1 t# W+ e' A) b2 P- L诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
5 T! q4 d# X) t% l: ^/ cthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

有啊，有很多经典的例子。

. E, V- }5 _1 H2 `比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

0 L( {/ n1 `" R0 G" R' T# e& xDon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
( |/ i1 l8 R. i9 ]# VTo dance on the air.
) a& s. d$ D2 k8 cIf I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
) N5 w& v$ p8 M: qSniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.

9 G% G7 ^+ u5 |5 }$ q( q, y' j0 VDon't be sad
- Y. y$ B" V0 |1 [When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
+ n, J: Z1 w* `4 lWild and free,
$ F9 J5 W$ T7 F9 T  `$ NFlirting with the lighting,
6 \; Y/ H! m0 b+ ]Playing tag with the wind,
- y. ]  a! ]$ y, f/ oChasing the thunder
Time and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
3 D" y  y8 ~) u3 _0 b5 x$ A8 a9 }Enjoying all of nature
* i- g  O1 _3 Y5 X4 G, @$ gWhile I'm waiting for thee.