In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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In the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
9 A5 Y$ I. f; @" g+ o1 {From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
( t* C6 ~, J' ^. y+ YNourished with my soul
! @8 n% k/ v+ B* }Devoured my sorrow by thee

  ]+ q# k) j( W' JIn the memory of my life
) }6 M. O1 q* }6 e4 @You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
0 q& ?; V( q; b  W% RSewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！

- e* m6 n9 {6 \1 U9 CIn the garden of my heart
  n! R. x( T6 E  W4 gYou planted a tree
+ E( l& [4 X( k0 vFrom sunset til dawn
' I- ]; S/ B' D9 |% ?' fThrough darkness to light
3 I1 z  R* f7 J3 o7 XNourished with my soul
+ A" P1 H0 V/ A5 F, T1 G' QDevoured my so ...

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眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？

写得真好。
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加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
" P& Z1 `; J7 K1 @2 O2 ^  x眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
' E1 p8 ?- W. J5 Z# Y写得真好。
/ c, A# Y5 @0 J, S6 R& a+ V( I& r加精加精！

我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
: e+ j: |( H0 Z, H' V8 b8 ?/ J如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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" j* A, }; y( k8 \) X- S$ z: h$ s; R$ nSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

2 D0 H/ g5 v. ]. y1 ?* S) K) ASewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

" m" ?- h1 P5 R4 R1 AThanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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& d* ]- X; y  }! D1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".
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# y( _4 s% g% C4 e2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
  d" E* \* |* [! ?% fthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

# D- M" p3 H. s$ x8 h0 b5 eShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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  J" A6 E- v4 i$ ^; h; `6 g有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

6 z1 v  ^0 }2 }% ^% iDon't weep at my grave
4 ~8 B' E5 L* w% cFor I am not there,
I've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
6 d1 _  x4 \/ f1 Q* \" HI'll be there too,
/ O) H, _3 b" t4 _Sniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.

  v$ f* m0 N5 _9 dDon't be sad
( G* V: ^3 n! n# ?; Z! R; WWhen you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
8 Y0 }% a4 b3 g+ EPlaying tag with the wind,
3 B- L2 C* j# ^3 M) LChasing the thunder
Time and again,
) W, s: O' E  m0 B1 T  m/ Q% g9 NSoaring with the eagle,
Swimming in the sea,
; f5 c8 d1 U' FEnjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.