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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level.
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# j5 \- L9 b4 T* `  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization.
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2 m! H  s( A( Y* v) r+ T2 u# F& W  2. For example, you work in a big factory. * D9 G2 i: j- Q4 G% i
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  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory. 7 G$ B. `7 h& }: Q/ }% A" z7 N: w8 f3 a
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  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job. & o1 v# N5 O' u3 U$ V9 e6 k

- f. P* L7 r3 T: V  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
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5 ^) s: c3 Y+ q7 w9 q  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck.
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  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck.   r+ f) l# {& |4 F( ?; {

! p2 E# o0 c/ X" o  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level. $ F8 A: |  t! W' X/ `6 V! B
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  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life. ! |$ N4 b$ [0 L5 I4 t! b

5 T/ y  _* z; `7 I$ r  P  6. Their brain is still very young. 5 X) U* J. d5 L7 v' ~
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  改进: They are still immature. & m& s- J; P% [" O! X9 X- o, y

; x. L, Y  F; T( y( n  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things. " C9 F& y# O  M2 P

& ^$ Z  n: N5 b& R  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better. 0 S9 a9 ^# e4 R  e1 T
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  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
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  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong. / [3 b" G) P- T0 ~6 H1 I; V

+ \* D  T4 N2 h7 U  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time. # S( m% s$ g1 T2 v3 u
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  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time. $ [' ?$ h5 ?- t6 r* s: y
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  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life.
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  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it.
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  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.
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  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development. % n# C# [1 W% Q+ o' r$ c  S3 y  N
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  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money. 2 R! Z* Y2 q* ?0 [- V5 U: t( _

' ], h3 \. h6 d' ^. r  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money.
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  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.
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  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one. : I$ s& a3 z! {3 M1 b
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  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money.
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. k( i/ _7 l6 B  O0 {  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more. 3 F; D  Q/ R6 B# z) }4 ~2 x

3 |1 Z" U7 U7 q  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products. 4 ]/ [- L' ?+ J( _" `! S7 s, I
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  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products.
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  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills. " Z. N$ R" w  ?( u; n0 L0 M
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  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills. ) K1 o! X" n& f

4 l2 c( l1 l! T  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians.
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% x8 D: \5 H) j& a+ f  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand.
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  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.
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6 b. U! Z4 I. U, J) \8 Y* b6 G  改进: This knowledge will become part of you.
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, ]" e' v0 O/ R' I; N) ?% A$ e  19. They cannot think clearly.
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  改进: They cannot think straight.
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& \; H/ x2 m, ~  20. Money can improve their living standard. ) x6 T, u" \! g2 P9 W  |3 y
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  改进: Money can improve their life. & [4 c: l5 a3 L( g
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  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money. $ t! c2 s9 U; i* c

$ R. q: c* N& Z5 V4 Z  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money. ! `/ m) h- q( P3 `4 q2 R% B
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  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life.
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  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life. 4 y  E6 L8 N) h  L# S

& g& F0 {  N- C& T4 l* I5 S' T  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later. - w8 N: h7 N$ g+ s. f& p
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  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn.
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  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano. ' f- q# {$ q9 s# V* O( |- k7 m
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  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes. 3 Q6 F# C- s5 p* P9 ]
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  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others.
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& z6 k5 s. U7 f  B6 K9 l6 E# [. c  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others. 1 |2 R% l% W  k2 a3 b+ @+ W

+ G- w; |) _% V9 z: G  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
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  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal. 7 [% q5 E' g% q# y: {

+ H* Z& K0 r7 h. E( v. T  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind. & ^% j- v# F; G9 l/ H- p

8 ?' M1 ~( x: F  @1 }/ K  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax. * c; K6 ]* H: _$ o; ^
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  28. What's about nonsmokers?
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  改进: What about nonsmokers?   D3 A/ a  o7 `2 {

3 D- ^4 R3 m  ~  29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
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8 `/ `' a$ T! C: F4 ~4 j  改进: Why not be a non-smoker? 4 q" R# S8 N  J7 W% e
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  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life. 5 p5 `$ J- z' l7 W

2 q- t9 l9 U  j1 v2 y8 ?  改进: Everyone has friends in his life. & E' B  Y- w7 A! X; {" V- {6 |( m
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  31. I am not good at maths, but English % n$ }; @7 C( S& o& f+ Y' D( C

. G: a1 L" W6 E  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
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  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time? 9 q( z* L9 j% [4 P. B/ L
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  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
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  33.It is children who clear about their interests. : p: f5 l& f$ K; Z' b+ k
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  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.
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+ G- d* I$ \7 r  34. I agree the latter idea.
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8 o, f+ {  w1 m, E$ d! W; l8 L  改进: I agree with the latter idea. 3 B9 ~5 u, [; w/ ^7 t
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  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo.   J* K) m3 ]+ I3 H) w% b+ `* V  q" x9 T
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  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo. ! P# V& j( r8 h4 Q

3 |7 U2 z' @$ b8 K" r$ L, H  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
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& p  d  [! U* i4 ]2 Z4 A$ h; @  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
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, o' z/ v2 X) }1 i# ?% ]2 O9 _  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.
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8 F5 n6 `+ q  z- }$ X$ i6 M  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.   V$ R8 U: e+ L: A4 t
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  38. No one knows all the things.
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, O, `9 ?* _6 F- H( V  改进: No one knows everything.
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& U9 Z/ H# B  q. f# v9 _. b  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
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  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life. " z  _$ O. Q/ H3 I1 m: V% Q3 r

+ h& ]- b+ o2 I0 u  h  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages
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  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages. 7 v) C3 E% h2 j" `+ Q, d7 T

- J/ a( i, b# A% c8 i  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up. 4 g! G# J. ~  K6 }3 n

' @; |6 ?4 A- ?' z8 l  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply   U3 c; f* x/ _* k2 k
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  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor. , m2 ?4 l8 B- i  W$ e& B
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  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
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  d4 ^  C& `( p& T2 e/ h& Z  43. They will learn the bad habits.
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  改进: They will develop bad habits. 7 e: n5 T3 _) W9 l" z

+ @( p/ E) Q1 k5 l9 ?* {& P  44. In this continued process, people make progress. * J- g. K/ o3 H( y
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$ |1 k1 p: ]" x* Q  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
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  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary.
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) b  B# N( r3 A! p1 u  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency.
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" X3 F: ?5 M( [2 u' A% R; U1 @1 e  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
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  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact. ' g$ i* V- }! q/ ]$ K! I

3 \2 `  H: ~" @2 H. w  改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result.
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0 @* [% D* G& t9 I  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing. " h# J8 R3 ~8 n! r( Q. F, h

5 ?) o+ l5 O+ R: k7 T% m  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream. : N' E; F' R9 r& t! u
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  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost. * N. L% |5 ]" L7 y2 ]

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% V, C) p3 z! |) w  50. I felt alone. 6 l$ f4 @' ?, T/ j0 \& ]( U) }
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  改进: I felt lonely.
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good.
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Thanks
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发表于 2005-2-24 09:08 | 显示全部楼层

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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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发表于 2005-8-24 21:11 | 显示全部楼层
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