我是第一次写英语故事，由于我来还没到一年，英语不是很好，请大家别小看我！ 0 X! [! o0 o3 G' y k1 ^. K; V; ~' x+ d$ k T H E S E V E N H O L Y B I R D A N D T H E H U N T E R ; d5 E6 Z; P" c3 G , T# R5 f7 h% o) {" c1 S 6 Z8 |* f0 B( O" V# h- B$ UA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.This big forest had a small og cain.2 X2 ]+ d0 q& h1 p5 \6 f
The hunter lived in the log cabin.Every day,birds needed to the forest's lake bath.But one day,the hunter 3 z; L) q' A: v6 m
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O+ g- Z/ |9 r: g6 x0 t8 \3 Y: PA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest, there was a small log cabin.& X% c3 p; P& Q( ~% _4 Q; m, t
A hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter ; t9 x2 p$ [- o8 ?6 j
saw the birds.
原帖由 紫色辣椒 于 2007-2-8 21:39 发表 N% ~8 L1 e$ ]. pA long time ago,the world had seven birds.They lived in a big forest.In the big forest。 there was a small log cabin. 5 q: m+ ?) f1 X& d# }% M( T5 JA hunter lived in the log cabin. Every day,birds needed to go to the lake in the forest to bathe themselves.But one day,the hunter % q6 s+ {1 ^/ L& t1 t8 x& q& Z
saw the birds.
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会不会更好呀？我不知道。。可以54的我说 $ q. P' g. h- ?0 K. j8 K* |* P7 F) j. x
还有。。用 needs 在那个地方才对吧？ - f* R, P% ^8 a6 e& F5 `: r2 u8 J6 Y2 o
ps：54=无视
原帖由 墨林恋 于 2007-2-9 15:45 发表 ! V: ?- w1 N8 R" d% N5 j& C' N2 k7 u4 G1 _* z
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用。。 : B* {5 i* F T / e2 U$ l) q, v! \" OThere was a small log cabin, and a hunter was living n there ' F. c4 F" ], `9 J % X1 }9 a: a1 z! M, `会不会更好呀？我不知道。。可以54的我说 * m3 D+ S3 \7 A& l: c, W; c# k0 w6 A6 n \# p
还有。。用 needs 在那个地方才对吧？3 E2 D$ {) ~: c# t! E( L0 s
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