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In the garden of my heart

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发表于 2006-6-25 01:05 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!
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8 Q* }& C4 p+ v/ }# mIn the garden of my heart
+ A7 a" ]. i. Q; {$ j: ZYou planted a tree6 V# P$ b. g# b
From sunset til dawn4 J; ?5 n0 ]8 l& B6 W
Through darkness to light
* v; s6 S/ r8 U: s- B% B/ v* _Nourished with my soul0 }8 Z$ ~0 z  w2 V+ s& H6 {6 ?
Devoured my sorrow by thee+ O1 v% s# E- e, @7 K9 a

" q! h' }$ Q  [# BIn the memory of my life; B' Q6 f2 Y# h9 e1 F2 j; c
You planted a dream
" Z4 @% S' Q( A8 T% bShould the sky fall down on me/ v5 B  o9 Z% z0 t4 q
May promises fade in the sea
2 m2 H$ ~6 @) x; u, I' r1 NSewing back every broken pieces- u3 L9 n- b% |$ r, T, E9 X, s
Bursting the love out of me
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:08 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表* Z; k8 R- ~7 }8 n6 x8 m2 I
听《All I want to do...》有感,涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑,见笑!1 z: E/ {+ b' V' q

! I: u' B/ M/ w8 l; cIn the garden of my heart
8 ^7 D' @- U4 D& A* `7 H  [You planted a tree
$ i8 J/ k) |! ?% m% r8 PFrom sunset til dawn& p/ k+ i+ @$ A2 w
Through darkness to light4 S- B/ g7 O; e- {9 g) e
Nourished with my soul
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' A- @* C5 z9 a' q眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
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4 c3 u. m, Z7 a写得真好。
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加精加精!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:20 | 显示全部楼层
哥们儿,你没喝多吧?没事就过来烧烟啊!
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发表于 2006-6-25 01:26 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
汗!居然有2单词不认识。:(
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发表于 2006-6-25 03:41 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
; K0 v  P( o2 H眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧?
# y9 V' a2 ^3 }" p- \7 h8 n. L& o$ N8 s写得真好。
3 c( Q; }1 D8 b# ~  C加精加精!
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我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗
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发表于 2006-6-25 05:31 | 显示全部楼层
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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发表于 2006-6-29 09:57 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
/ F7 M' x& p8 p如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下,在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。
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五月JJ这个意境,想想实在是罗曼蒂克,不过在爱屯,海天相接是没有了,只有在湖畔雪山了:)
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发表于 2006-6-29 11:06 | 显示全部楼层
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-6-29 18:23 | 显示全部楼层
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原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表, I/ K) k& P5 ]! A+ N
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Sewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

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Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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0 t0 c/ A2 I7 R' l% U! e1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".: v! i+ ?& G4 R
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2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.
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发表于 2006-6-30 01:17 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民,但很喜气!很有乐在其中的意境啊!
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发表于 2006-7-2 10:50 | 显示全部楼层
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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发表于 2006-7-2 13:50 | 显示全部楼层
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表& B2 m" I0 B& L* u8 r
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。" A  O5 `( T( v. h/ ~: `: r
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?
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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-7-2 13:56 | 显示全部楼层
同言同羽 置业良晨
原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
7 r: z2 L6 m, k$ {" e& G/ Nthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。- V! |% E" g) I
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Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》  v; e  ~: s* ?2 b
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Don't weep at my grave  F' g. ^% x" y2 P+ S0 N8 ^/ N( h
For I am not there,
! a7 L& n. b7 I7 CI've a date with a butterfly! x) m) t4 @3 E+ G
To dance on the air.+ G3 x% b) v- t4 {
If I'm missed, find a flower,: @, z) g' N9 ?( |5 f) o' \
I'll be there too,
1 _- T% p( q& y8 W$ ~; B5 x! |Sniffing it's fragrance) k9 W9 O( N3 G  c' M
Right next to you.  P  \! x: f' P* {

$ \8 f2 o  \6 [2 n" wDon't be sad' D; P7 k9 n5 U% k0 u
When you remember me,
' L  n6 r; _$ @! }: CFor I'm singing in the sunshine,7 H& a3 c/ Q7 b: T9 V) R/ q7 O, R8 j
Wild and free,
6 ?3 J( e9 J6 GFlirting with the lighting,) s5 M, |2 q: o' }$ m- |# y
Playing tag with the wind,3 S' i+ j% S! K
Chasing the thunder4 ^8 F+ F* @( F* u% G7 D8 f
Time and again,
- u3 h6 V9 ]% y6 p; _7 c  `# KSoaring with the eagle,0 C' a1 v) w$ U
Swimming in the sea,1 L4 j5 @* e* J! f
Enjoying all of nature
2 \) y8 P  ]/ G1 s; KWhile I'm waiting for thee.
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