In the garden of my heart

Dawson

听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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8 s3 y( r1 [/ F" n( C( G, C3 lIn the garden of my heart
You planted a tree
From sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
Nourished with my soul
; }. W8 `1 D7 n# x# x+ t9 lDevoured my sorrow by thee
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In the memory of my life
You planted a dream
Should the sky fall down on me
May promises fade in the sea
Sewing back every broken pieces
Bursting the love out of me

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云山水月

原帖由 Dawson 于 2006-6-25 01:05 发表
) v5 j% t+ i; X% N1 F听《All I want to do...》有感，涂鸦了这首小诗。见笑，见笑！
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7 y& ]  y8 I' E: \+ r& p8 D/ GIn the garden of my heart
( q) r/ a8 K6 M: `You planted a tree
$ Z; k$ j' p/ v; M; dFrom sunset til dawn
Through darkness to light
, r+ v6 q, ]" I; |' T3 S) o$ e! BNourished with my soul
Devoured my so ...

, K8 _- z' G( G4 c% Q2 E- a眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
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写得真好。

加精加精！

Greatwall

哥们儿，你没喝多吧？没事就过来烧烟啊！

九月

汗！居然有２单词不认识。：（

Justing

原帖由 云山水月 于 2006-6-25 01:08 发表
眼没花哈。。。第一首本版的英文诗吧？
写得真好。
加精加精！

. v# ~" G! b$ }+ ^  o3 h我曾在本版也发过一首英文诗

五月

如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

微澜

原帖由 五月 于 2006-6-25 05:31 发表
如果能谱上曲, 夕阳西下，在海天相接的海边, 轻抚吉他浅唱, 定是首动人的心曲。

  i6 s1 _. t3 c' P- }五月JJ这个意境，想想实在是罗曼蒂克，不过在爱屯，海天相接是没有了，只有在湖畔雪山了：）

朱顺顺

Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.
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Dawson

原帖由 红岫添乱 于 2006-6-29 11:06 发表
Should the sky fall down on me--- leave out "down", as is  no good here.

) F- C$ |6 n6 V5 r' YSewing back every broken pieces--- every broken piece, or all broken pieces.

Thanks for your insightful comment, however I have to disagree with what you said.
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( L& R3 R( ~3 d% r, K1) Sky falls down on sb. is a very common phrase or idom that's been used in a lot of occasions, meaning end of the world. For example, it was used in Savage Garden's song "truly deeply madly".

2) Every broken pieces, hmmm, again broken pieces is a phrase, I know grammar wise it looks awkard, but that "S" at the end puts a nice rythem to the poem.

月光宝盒

红岫添乱 这喜滋滋的头像虽很农民，但很喜气！很有乐在其中的意境啊！

FCUK

thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。
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五月

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
thee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

Shall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

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诗歌, 重在意境和语感, 没有那么严格教条的语法要求吧.

Dawson

原帖由 FCUK 于 2006-7-2 10:50 发表
+ w, s! e/ ~7 J7 G) C) Sthee 和you, 好像没有同时用的吧。

/ f7 a1 O; I+ I, dShall I compare thee to a Summer's day?

有啊，有很多经典的例子。
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) w# v) x' A; P5 O1 ]. T- |! Q& b比如Sharon A. Bryington那首著名的《While Waiting For Thee》

! p' q" L" a  |9 i+ |9 HDon't weep at my grave
For I am not there,
: p0 _$ C2 q# B& t* F9 q* Z% t  FI've a date with a butterfly
To dance on the air.
If I'm missed, find a flower,
I'll be there too,
* L% E" Z$ a0 `; z/ M% h: JSniffing it's fragrance
Right next to you.

Don't be sad
When you remember me,
For I'm singing in the sunshine,
Wild and free,
Flirting with the lighting,
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4 c5 x) \  S; o, n) D. ^6 gChasing the thunder
. v+ P* ?: N$ n, g9 I7 }4 z# n) ^& GTime and again,
Soaring with the eagle,
$ `5 D6 B: a) H2 mSwimming in the sea,
Enjoying all of nature
While I'm waiting for thee.