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  1. The artist's work pushes our civilization to a higher level. + H% x# f8 k# A7 J- g
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  改进:Artists' work upgrades our civilization.
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5 K2 n/ W: e4 A8 m2 R0 i3 V& K# J, _  2. For example, you work in a big factory. 4 @  \6 f9 ?; D; ?6 D9 N$ `" j

. T. r' |1 A+ e8 G# w# N- M  改进: Suppose you work in a big factory. ( a, O. C! J, U6 r8 ^- Y% z3 N. f
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  3. You'll find you are fit for business and you can make it your main job.
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3 _6 c2 V- K1 V+ C2 b6 w  X  改进:You'll find that you are cut out for business and you can make it your career.
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  4. We will own nothing at all if we depend on luck. 9 p& x+ O, {% I, z
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  改进: We will get nowhere if we rely on luck. : Q  D' X9 H$ L5 ~# V( \( n6 B

8 `* P- G% I7 q  5. He will get a higher salary to improve his living level. 4 ~/ @9 j* [2 t* N( M; o- W
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  改进: He will get a higher salary, thus improving his life. # i6 a/ ~0 A. m5 H7 p% O2 ^5 X6 T

% x  x$ E5 [- \% s  6. Their brain is still very young. 9 P! R/ e8 D" T3 \. i

% a' K6 m% j5 d, Z" U" l: w7 o+ ]  改进: They are still immature. ! h7 n) L8 v! X& d! q4 g) i1 C

& N7 `6 v8 d, z* a( ~' u# n  7. Dissatisfaction makes people produce desire for better things. , R5 ]3 n; Z6 Q/ t4 k- a) j

5 c+ y4 F  K0 p4 k/ q# X+ h* y' g3 M  改进: Dissatisfaction impels people for the better.
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* f; K$ L3 X5 [# t3 O% E3 C8 _+ e  8. They can't analyze clearly what is right and what is wrong.
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8 R1 T. q' \2 ~# N; U# I: M2 R  改进: They cannot tell right from wrong.
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: L+ a" T1 P3 E1 c1 H  9. It will help children to form a good habit of dealing with time.
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% M! U" Y& p* A# K: [  改进: It will help children learn to make good use of time. 6 |% ?8 u% A  {5 v, f  i

- U1 d! z3 n* f' ~' Q5 P7 ^+ p9 p  10. Though it is not the best job, it afford to his life. $ e" S  Y* [( z8 l& i% m
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  改进: Though it is not the best job, a job is a job. He can make ends meet with it. 1 c* e9 s. ^1 \5 i/ C( G

6 M8 U% `; z5 z  11. Since people are always not satisfied with their present situation, they want further development.
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" W6 l0 y# `* P' L) x- C  改进: Since people are never satisfied with their status quo, they want further development. # |/ U6 e" ?4 S9 n0 C8 X
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  12. The only thing they need to do is to find a job which can easily get big money.
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8 Q2 e' N6 H$ C% w0 x  改进: The only thing they need to do is to find a job that can bring them big money. 8 a4 c5 C) C2 }7 w4 l

& I7 r7 Z, p" j  13. They like an active life but not a peaceful life.
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  改进: They like an active life rather than a peaceful one. ( k6 I, i: q% P4 F. ~+ q

' t; f  y$ g1 R, t( ~8 T0 `  14. Some cigarettes may even cost a larger sum of money. 0 q) b. `" a" R0 i) s% u( j* @

+ B' L; K# e3 ~/ R" ^3 K# [  改进: Some cigarettes may cost even more. $ m- B6 S- h. N5 X, w

- x& o7 ^: T# b2 P  s9 p( I  15. Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the discovery of new products.
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  改进: Firstly, dissatisfaction encourages the invention of new products. / W/ a9 O, ^& {7 [/ b( i' Z, T# }

# x* b! k( J- l6 h2 P  16. In order to suit the needs of entering into work, students must grasp some technical skills. " ?" R4 E- H- b3 w2 X4 s/ E- b
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  改进: In order to meet the needs of future work, students must learn some practical skills.   Q# B( Q1 H# s7 i2 M+ C: Z

) N$ d; k7 D: H0 e/ d  17. It is very necessary more qualified scientists and technicians. ' }4 w0 y( t0 }# q9 N7 v

/ Q4 O5 O2 P! x* r" o( Y  U  改进: Qualified scientists and technicians are in great demand. # M; [" i( ]7 v: k/ z: R% Y
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  18. This knowledge will become a part of your body.
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  改进: This knowledge will become part of you. 4 a' _1 n( z8 ]' U7 E: T  ?8 Q, g4 A$ X

7 b- v" k' o, H  19. They cannot think clearly. * p. n5 E8 X  a( f! X6 Y

' m! F' ^8 J3 V& C  改进: They cannot think straight. * }4 }- b7 C$ j3 \) k5 X( @( W" @4 ^
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  20. Money can improve their living standard. ( L* G# k- q# m3 w9 d
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  改进: Money can improve their life.
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  21. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money. - h  T7 V" x* h% t, h1 u3 x* W
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  改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money. " f3 w. j+ H* N" R9 Y% l
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  22. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life. ; E! g( |' e) \0 f/ ]% i

3 w) Q, X0 z$ z4 d) v  改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled and will be unhappy all his life.
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  23. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.
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  改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn.
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  24. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano. 1 N" e, H' R2 q8 A/ q0 u4 ?
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  改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes.
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  25. When I want to absorb somebody else's opinion, I will study with others.
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  改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others. 5 e3 M; y  U$ l) L8 t
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  26. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
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- Z' o1 }9 N1 L8 D4 J+ u: y1 h/ W$ b  改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
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  27. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
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3 F9 P, M2 O1 T! G3 @  改进: Cigarettes can help you relax. / R0 E2 Z3 S/ h5 _# S- L
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  28. What's about nonsmokers?
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: A& v1 m. a6 [8 ?6 ^3 e  改进: What about nonsmokers?
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' R7 B, N0 W" J5 N' p/ ?" M# c+ k) Y; k9 x  29. Why not to be a non-smoker?
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7 G; c2 F0 W) m6 z7 M( n  改进: Why not be a non-smoker? 7 s* D: k* U, L* x# j4 g

$ E% g; p: v7 R5 D0 C  30. Everyone will have many friends in his life.
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2 e4 W9 z3 X3 |$ }0 u; v0 I, q( v  R  改进: Everyone has friends in his life.
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  31. I am not good at maths, but English
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; `" y$ `( [  N) ~/ g/ |0 D( ^  改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
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+ \3 u# q8 A2 d; m8 [* ?7 h" V  32. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children's leisure time? + [. I% |! A4 h

. o1 a$ d7 Q4 M/ D8 ]7 F0 E  改进: Who is the proper person to plan children's leisure time?
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  33.It is children who clear about their interests.
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1 ]# Z% M6 T' P' j  U  改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests. ; e- X, p* Y5 |4 z8 G' o
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  34. I agree the latter idea.
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  改进: I agree with the latter idea.
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+ ?  {& M9 J( S+ s- J0 d6 W  35. Many people dissatisfy with the status quo. ' {9 t8 |5 b' G9 ^$ [  r

: W' r! t, u4 x* a( ~; `  N& }; @  改进: Many people are dissatisfied with the status quo.
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* k( N$ V8 c5 M5 T8 f) K7 g5 \  36. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
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  改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
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  37. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are. / u  k/ X7 u1 H: F7 c
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  改进:People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
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  38. No one knows all the things.
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" e& U% e. I, T8 i! B* i  改进: No one knows everything. * S  G$ |8 N( {' F

6 Z1 t2 b7 e8 ?( V# A. w  39. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life. . X, l0 ]. a, \6 v% e7 X. |- M

! G. _, l; _& L; ?' m0 N  改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
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7 X7 _$ |# O. [  40. Each form of having friends has its advantages
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  改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
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  41. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up.
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: F/ a6 e/ G" c  改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply
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0 n/ A4 |6 x9 F3 K9 k3 i& R  42. Luckily, he recognized an American professor.
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. K8 Y1 b  K4 T. _! `7 N& l4 r  改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
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  43. They will learn the bad habits. 7 ?5 G! `# j- G$ n6 n
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  改进: They will develop bad habits.
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$ G6 J0 `  i7 X  44. In this continued process, people make progress. 8 S# `# J1 R" M, s. Y

. s) y! I5 x8 y* E# p- f4 `7 J9 D0 V  改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
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  45. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary. 4 N  z& L* }* C0 V1 w
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  改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary.
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  46. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency. * g8 Y9 ?3 J2 E  t. T
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  改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
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  47. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact. 3 L) X# B; }6 q9 _/ e- v. T8 q
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  改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result. 2 K! ~' P; g1 m, ?

$ ~! G! h2 m. x9 ~- C' N  48. You spend all your life to fulfill your willing. - y7 i: p& j! B+ ]
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  改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream. / h3 z# _7 \& i* q# w1 _

, p4 c- p: R, M8 p6 J3 P; }  49. Children should be taught disciplines in order to avoid unnecessary lost. % {  f8 j! Z) S3 D& U8 n3 L/ m/ H

; g# ?7 r) h, y$ c% d4 M  改进: Children should be taught discipline in order to avoid unnecessary loss.
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  50. I felt alone. % _/ b7 Z1 S/ B

1 I" o3 ~) ?3 M+ S& \8 v  改进: I felt lonely.
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发表于 2005-2-24 08:39 | 显示全部楼层
wow, where did you get those sample (the cheglish one)? I have to say the revised samples are really really good. " M: I2 y; F  s6 V% D
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 楼主| 发表于 2005-2-26 07:02 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队 追求完美
平时的积累,呵呵!
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发表于 2005-2-26 14:03 | 显示全部楼层

顶!

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发表于 2005-3-1 08:25 | 显示全部楼层

很好。

能否解释一下 status quo 是什么意思。
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发表于 2005-3-1 08:37 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
是现状的意思
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发表于 2005-4-9 18:26 | 显示全部楼层
:lol::lol::lol:
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发表于 2005-4-9 20:42 | 显示全部楼层
Wow,看得我头晕目悬的...还是记不住...呵呵
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发表于 2005-4-9 21:09 | 显示全部楼层
老杨团队,追求完美;客户至上,服务到位!
有些改进似乎意思有些改变...
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发表于 2005-8-24 02:47 | 显示全部楼层
好哦.xiexie
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发表于 2005-8-24 19:48 | 显示全部楼层
thanks
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